Published August 17, 2010
Poetry is life,
and life is poetry.
Poetry is uttered from the mouth,
and from the mouth poetry utters.
Poetry is read by you,
and you are read by poetry.
Poetry is written,
and write, poetry does.
Poetry is inspired by the Cosmos,
and the Cosmos is inspired by poetry.
Poetry is yelled towards a wall,
and from a wall poetry can yell.
Poetry is perceived by men and women,
and men and women are perceived by poetry.
Poetry is whispered softly,
and whisper softly, poetry does.
Poetry is anything you want it to be,
and anything you want is poetry.
Poetry is written by the poet,
and the poet, poetry writes.
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The writing itself is very simple
yet it conveys such depth..
Clean, elegant and profound....
That was beautiful
I hope to see more amazing works.
but do try to elaborate more
It can come off us blunt
but personally I liked it...
Hello Face Engine( that's a new one)
It's MergSword here with a review on a lovely, lovely, night. ( This close to putting day)
WHAT NEEDS TO BE FIXED
1. Poetry is whispered softly,
and whisper softly, poetry does.
This line seems a bit off compared to the other ones in my opinion. Whisper softly poetry does? What does that quite mean? It think you should replace that with Softly Whispered is Poetry.
That's about all that really needs to be fixed. You did awfully well! Although I don't think it deserves its own number, but the lines could possibly make a bit more sense.
WHAT I LIKED
1.Poetry is inspired by the Cosmos,
and the Cosmos is inspired by poetry.
I liked this stanza ( stanza 5 ) a lot! Especially because, unlike a few other ones, this one made sense. It was also very creative!
2.The introduction. It's about the magnetic openings, and you did well on this part.
3. THE POEM
Conclusion: You did a great job, I just had a little trouble comprehending.
STAY AWSOME
~MergSword
The poem clearly has a good concept, but a lot of the lines are too blunt, and don't make enough sense as they should.
Maybe you could work on developing the stanzas a bit more, and being more descriptive. Right now, I just see what poetry is to a regular person, not a poet. Like describe how petry is life and how poetry has all of these emotions. Make your readers really understand what poetry is. I'm not really getting that from you. Hope that helped!
Keep writing!
~Lindsay
Hi! I'm Mizz Iceberg. Nice to meet you.
I can see where you're going with this poem, but I don't think it's working. The poem seems like a list. I read and write poetry. I love poetry, but this doesn't ring a bell. I can't relate to it. Perhaps because you failed to personalize it. The speaker seems very detached from the poem, and a lot of the terms are very ambiguous so they fail to bring much meaning or emotion. At the same time, you've got too much going on. You need to focus on a smaller topic. You jump from thing to another, terming is as poetry. For example:
This stanza in itself begs to be expanded on. It seems careless to just term it as life and be done with it. Go deeper into it. What do you mean by life? That you can't live without it? Make this poem more intimate. You're holding the reader at an arm's length.
Also, I'm not too big a fan of the whole formula of:
"x is poetry
and poetry is x"
It becomes boring and repetitive very quickly. I think you need to scratch this poem out and start over. Obviously poetry means a lot to you. And I want to understand what it means. Through this poem, I can't get a better understanding at all. For example:
I don't understand how that is possible. I can't relate. Obviously it does mean something to you. You must go deeper into it though. I mean what I got from that stanza was a mental image of a wall reciting an emotional Shakespearean sonnet. It's a humorous image. It made me giggle. But, I'm sure you were earnest, and it was not meant to be humorous. But I really can't understand what you mean by it. You need to extend that metaphor.
This isn't getting us anywhere. It builds no image, tells me nothing, doesn't make me see things in a new way. It's way too ambiguous and general a term. What I think you should do is choose one of the things that you've listed as being poetry and go deeper into it and explore it. So, narrow down you subject. You need one subject, not a whole list. That way we'll also getter better idea and after finishing the poem, it'll be easier for us to derive something from the poem. There is a be central focus.
I loved the last stanza:
That's beautiful. See now I can see what poetry means to you. You accomplished that in this stanza. It writes you. Maybe you can expand on this. Whatever it is you choose to narrow down, then expand on, choose only one thing. It's neater, simpler and more powerful.
Good luck! If you have any questions feel free to PM me.
Interesting, but it's good. At first, toward the beginning, the poem's a bit weaker, but toward the end it's stronger. There aren't any mistakes in grammar or anything as far as I can tell.
This part I really like. It really captures how I feel about poetry. Good job